Sunday, March 21, 2010

2.2 Against the Death Penalty

I was raised to cherish all life, but at the same time I was taught at a young age that bad behavior will result in negative consequences from my parents and teachers. My childhood reflects these beliefs. I was always a good boy who mostly did what was right and after realizing some actions were wrong, did not do them again. My childhood learning of good and bad differs much from the real world. This can be seen within the death penalty. The death penalty takes what I have learned to the next level. The issue that covers the death penalty is what should a criminal receive for a serious case of murder? Do we as a state cherish life over justice? Or do we take a page out of the rules of Hammurabi and use the old saying “An eye for an eye”?

At the age of 31, Paul Powell was recently put to death by the state of Virginia using the electric chair (Stewart 1). Paul Powell was given the death penalty because of the rape and murder of a 16 year old girl. Paul Powell was originally sentenced in 2000 and was convicted with murder, but that was overturned. After this incident, Paul Powell decided to write a letter bragging about the crime he committed and explains in some detail what he did that night of the crime. This became new evidence and he was later convicted of murder and given the death penalty in 2003. The idea that this man was originally given the wrong sentence explains some of the flaws of the judicial process.

Since 1973, when the death penalty was reinstated in a majority of the states, a total of 135 inmates have been released from the death row and are now considered innocence. (Death Penalty 101) All of these verdicts were overturned due to new DNA evidence that revealed the criminal was innocence to begin with. It is easy feel remorse for the criminals that spent a good portion of their life in jail, but no one realizes the problem of these people wasting their lives in the correctional system. This is due to the people who made the mistakes of conviction not admitting to their flawed decision. As a result, no one will ever be blamed when a situation like this occurs. This also brings up new ideas about how inaccurate the death penalty process can be.

An issue that is connected with the death penalty is the execution of people with mental retardation problems. The academic journal “Standford-Binet and WAIS IQ differences and their implications for adults with intellectual disability”, “People with ID (mental retardation) convicted of capital crimes are no longer subject to the death penalty.” (Wayne 1) This quote sums up how the death penalty process in the United States deals with people who have mental retardation problems. Many people, including myself, consider the death penalty cruel and immoral. I believe a person with mental problems could have not understood the crimes and actions they commit. If this is the case, the system could be killing a person of society who did not know what he/she was doing wrong. But at the same time, there have been accusations of people pretending to have mental problems to avoid the death penalty. It was estimated that 35 people have been executed with mental retardation problems since 1977 (Reynolds 1). It is “estimated” because there are some cases where a mental retardation can be very mild or could be overlooked by the system. Even with many laws being added to protect people with mental retardation against the death penalty, the issue of execution of people with mental retardation problems can be argued both ways when discussing the sides of the death penalty.

When talking about the death penalty, there are many issues that force people to choose one side. However, these same issues that force people to choose a side sometimes makes other people stuck on what side to choose. These issues include the execution of people with mental retardation, the idea that a jury could be bias, that evidence could be flawed, and many more. These issues are the reasons why the death penalty is controversial in the United States.

There are many arguments that could be made for or against using the death penalty. I feel the United States is better off not using the death penalty. The death penalty does not cherish the life of criminals and does not make fair and equal judgments on all criminals that go through the judicial process. Also, I feel there could be bias within the people who run the process, which creates an unfair trial and could result in a wrong verdict. The main reason I don’t agree with the death penalty is because the people placed in prisons have a chance to change their views and ways of life. To give someone another chance to change their way of life seems like a better option than taking their life away. I am not saying the people that support the death penalty do not care about the life of others, but I feel the supporters of the death penalty value justice and fairness over life.

There is inconsistency with the consequences assigned for similar actions. For example, a person who commits murder can get 10 years in jail and another person who commits murder can receive the death penalty. Could that be due to the way the murderer killed his victim? Could it have been the type of person he killed? In the end, the result is exactly the same, a person was murdered. From the Charlotte Observer News Paper article Death Penalty System “irretrievably” broken, the article stated, “there was no way to ensure essential fairness and consistency of the system (death penalty) because it produces such widely varying results. (“Death Penalty system ‘irretrievably broken’” 2)” It doesn’t seem fair that one murder could receive the death penalty for killing a person and another person could receive 10 years. The death penalty system is not fair to all criminals.

In the United States, a person can only receive the death penalty by a jury of people making a unanimous decision. People can receive the death penalty through unfair trials because the bias jury members could have and racial stereotypes that the jury members could have brought into the courtroom. Jury members are screened and asked questions in order to prevent any them from having any bias towards a person or race, but in reality bias can’t ever be prevented. It’s not that they are all racist, but all people have some idea of a certain type of person or race. These ideas could be positive or negative ideas, but it is nearly impossible to find a jury full of people who are not bias. From the Death penalty Information Center, an example of a bias towards African Americans can be seen in this quote, “careful analysis of race and death penalty … which reveals that the odds of receiving a death sentence are nearly four times (3.9) higher if the defendant is black. (Dieter 3)” This quote explains an existing bias towards African Americans in some regions in the Untied States. In 2006, a total of 649 African Americans were executed in all the states that allow the death penalty (“Capital Punishment, 2006- Statistical Tables”). It is unknown if those African Americans received a fair trial with an unbiased jury. The idea that people can be bias towards other people and come to a decision that produces a wrongful death sentence makes the idea of using the death penalty less appealing.

The main reason the United States has jails is to house criminals and keep them away from society. If the main goal of jails is to protect the society, criminals should be kept in jail forever. This idea does seem stretched, but another reason for jails is to allow people to change. Jails, also known as correctional facilities, can be the perfect environment for criminals to change their lives before reentering the general public. These criminals are isolated from the general public and placed into an environment where everyone around them has committed crimes and has done bad. Being able to see who criminals really are can inspire inmates to change who they want to be. To give someone the death penalty is essentially robbing a person’s ability to change their life. There are people who prefer to see people executed because of the crimes they have committed, but a person who is able to realize what he/she has done will result in a better ending, even if the criminal never gets out of jail.

There are arguments that could be made to end the use of the death penalty. But supporters of the death penalty will believe the system is fair for all crimes that are committed. They also believe that the screenings for the jury members are suffice in determining if a person will or will not receive a death sentence without bias. There are many creditable reasons why people should support the death penalty. The main reason is that people support the death penalty is because they believe in justice. These supporters want the public to see that the United States is a land that is fair and serves justice to all their criminals. The death penalty is one way they are able to accomplish this.

The death penalty has left the nation divided. While researching this topic, it was realized that a compromise can never be made with the idea of executing a criminal for their crime. However, things can be changed about how the criminal is executed and different verdicts other than the death sentence. Rather than being executed, more people can be placed into jail with a life sentence. This is the only compromise that can ever be made with the issue of executing someone or not executing someone. Even though it will cost tax payer more to keep these criminals in jail, it is the only way to satisfy both sides. Another option could be the method of execution. The current methods of execution are electric chair, lethal injection, hanging, firing squad and lethal gas (“Methods of Execution” 1). The best thing to do is to eliminate the inhumane methods of execution and to only use lethal injection. The lethal injection process was created with the intent to provide the criminal a painless death. The most moral thing to give to a criminal should be humane and painless death. This also ties into the idea that relates with public executions. The idea that the criminal knows that many people are watching him die can make him suffer mentally. From the academic journal “Neither Justice nor Mercy: Public and Private Executions in Rhode Island,” the idea of public executions and its history through the state of Rhode Island is explained. It explains that originally people were supporting the idea of public executions through “hangings”. But in the end, the novel explains how people decided to step in to abolish these “unruly behaviors” (Chambers 1). With these suggestions, I feel more people will have fewer arguments about the death penalty.

The issue of the death penalty will always be a controversial one in the United States. This is because the extremes can never be combined into one solution. But with some changing and some compromising, many people would not disagree with each other about the death penalty anymore.


“Capital Punishment, 2006- Statistical Tables”. Bureau of Justice Statistics. 2006. Office of Justice Programs. Web March 10, 2010

Chambers, Stephen. “Neither Justice nor Mercy: Public and Private Executions in Rhode Island” New England Quarterly. September 2009. EBSCO Host Web March 10, 2010

“Death Penalty 101”. American Civil Liberties Union. April 7, 2007. American Civil Liberties Union. Web March 10, 2010“Death Penalty system ‘irretrievably broken’”. Charlotte Observer. March 21, 2010. Charlotte Observer. Web March 10, 2010

“Death Penalty system ‘irretrievably broken’”. Charlotte Observer. March 21, 2010. Charlotte Observer. Web March 10, 2010

Dieter, Richard. “The Death Penalty in Black and White; who lives, Who Dies, Who Decides” The Death Penalty Information Center. The Death Penalty Information Center. Web March 10, 2010

“Methods of Execution”. Prosecuting Attorney. The Clark County. Web March 10, 2010

Reynolds, Dave. “Mental Retardation and the Death Penalty in the U.S.A”. Ragged Online. May 1, 2001. Ragged Online. Web March 10, 2010

Silverman, Wayne. “Standford-Binet and WAIS IQ differences and their implications for adults with intellectual disability”. March 2010. EBSCO Host. Web March 10, 2010

Stewart, Amanda. “Paul Powell Dies in electric Chair”. Inside NoVa. March 18, 2010. News and Messengers. Web March 10, 2010

16 comments:

  1. Dear Bryan,
    I thought your paper was really informative and that your intro was very clear and precise. After finishing your paper I would suggest that you try to take a side and make sure to stay close to that topic rather than being a common ground for both ideas. I see that you are trying to establish that common ground which is great for this kind of paper, but I felt like I was uncertain of what your argument really was and how you really felt towards the subject. I would suggest that you pick a side and try to understand the other side rather than agreeing with it. I thought you had really strong points in your paper and great sources to go along with that. You might consider referring back to the online PowerPoint on the class blog on directions for citations rather than just having websites listed at the end as well. In addition to fixing the wok cited I would also suggest adding in-text citations to the entirety of your paper. I thought you had such great explanations on your topic and examples as well, so great job. One last suggestion would be to make sure not to overdo it with rhetorical questions. These questions interest the audience, but they can be overdone as well and take away from the credibility of your paper. Overall, you did a really nice job on your first draft. Good luck on the remainder of the process!
    Thank you,
    Katelyn Bell

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  2. Dear Bryan,
    I really liked your paper and I thought that it had a lot of really good aspects t it and ith just a few tweeks to them I think your paper can really grow.
    First, I loved your opening paragraph. My favorite part were the sentences at the end of the paragraph because they really set up your paper and let the reader know what you were going to be talking about the the view-points you would be covering.
    I also think you did a really good job with incorperating the rogerian style into your paper. You had a lot if not all of the spects needed to make a strong rogerian argument.
    I also really liked your closing paragraph. I thought you introduced a couple viable options available for the death penalty. I especially liked how you presented only doing the death penalty if it was through injection. I think this was a very generous compromise on your half but I think it also made a lot of sense.
    The only thing I would really suggest you fix are just putting a few more stats into your paper. I wrote on the hard copy where a few more facts would be very helpful and supportive to your argument.
    Other then that I think you did a really nice job and I wish you the best of luck on your final draft!

    Kara

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  3. Dear Bryan,
    I really enjoyed reading this paper! I especially found your opening paragraph to be very interesting. I really like how you used personal examples and talked about yourself in beginning, it made it interesting to read! I also like how you used rhetorical questions in the paragraph. First off, other than having an interesting topic, you have really great sources. The sources you have incorporated into your paper really help and provide knowledge and background to the subject. You also did a good job with incorporating the Rogerian style into the essay. A few things to consider when writing your next draft would be to state your claim a little bit earlier in the essay. I found it confusing while reading through your paper to figure out which side of the argument you were on. If you make your claim more known and really stick to one side of the argument, I think that will make your paper much stronger. Also, there are a few little grammatcial problems like spelling, and words being left out that you might want to look over. Overall, I think you have a great paper and if you work on a few things it will be even better!- Olivia Miller

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  4. Bryan,

    I commend you on your abilities to take on a very controversial issue in today’s society. I found your paper to be very informative. Also, your stance on the issue was very well written. You were not too forward with your points.

    However, there are just a few minor things I would change. I feel like paragraph five could be added after the intro. It will fit better there considering that you are talking why the death penalty is a controversial issue.

    Also, in paragraph twelve you mention the academic journal, “Neither Justice nor Mercy: Public and Private Executions in Rhode Island.” You say that in the end, the novel explains how people decided to abolish these unruly behaviors. Maybe you can explain how they abolished this, and how other states can follow Rhode Island’s lead.

    After finishing the paper, I felt like you should work on your transitions from paragraph to paragraph. Sometimes it didn’t flow as well as it could have. Keep working on it.

    Lastly, you just had some grammatical issues. You started off some sentences with the same words. For example, in paragraph two you say “Paul Powell” three times in a row. On the actual copy of your paper, I circled repetitive words.

    Otherwise, I thought your paper was really good. I hope this helped, and good luck on your next draft!

    -Kate

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  5. Dear Bryan,
    I liked the topic of your paper, it was really intersting and easy to relate to. I really liked how you started off the essay. Your intro was really attention grabbing. I liked how you used your values and the way you were raised to start off the essay. I also liked how you used many examples of the different secnerios that could take place. There are a couple things that I would try to improve on your essay. One thing is that I was kind of confused as to what you were trying to cite. There were some citations after certian sentences but I didn't see quotation marks so I didn't know what sentences were yours and which were the source's sentences. Another thing was that I kind of felt overwhelmed and because of this I was lost at some points of your essay. I felt as though there was so much information that I was kind of lost. I also think that there was alot of repetion of this information so I think alot of the repeated information could be cut out to give you a better and more concice paper. I was also confused at the 5th paragraph because when reading it it seemed as though I was reading the conclusion and if I hadn't scolled down, I would have though that this was the end of the paper. Make sure to try and fix this paragraph because it seems more like a conculsion rather than a normal paragraph. YOu might want to try and add more information on this paragraph so it doesn't seem confusing. I think you have done a great job so far. Good luck on your final draft!

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  6. Hi Bryan!!

    I just want to start off by saying I thought you did an amazing job with this paper! It is such and interesting topic, and you explained it very well. I also thought you did a wonderful job at narrowing down the broad topic of the death penalty. There is just so much to say but you put it into very clear points. I really enjoyed how you started off with the story of Powell, it was a very interesting way to start off a paper, but it set the mood for the rest of the paper and I was totally intrigued. I also really liked how you told both views but it was clear where you stood. Also the compromises you made were very good. A couple things you could improve on would be repetition. There were a few times throughout the paper where I felt that you were repeating yourself, like in the 6th paragraph. I also think that you could make your conclusion a little more unique like your intro. It starts off so strong and I think you should end just as strong. Other than that I think you have done an amazing job so far. Good luck with your final draft!!

    Railey Hiser

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  7. Bryan

    Great job so far! I really like your topic and I agree with a lot of your points. I think the death penalty is a difficult topic to take on but you did well with it. I think your sources are strong and you paper not only provides your side on the topic but also a lot of information on the death penalty. I really liked your introduction and your conclusion. Those aspects of your paper are very strong. Not only did your introduce your topic in a way to grab the reader but you also related it to your personal self. I thought that was great. You were very rogerian with your argument which is also good considering that the death penalty is a difficult topic for many people.
    However, I think you have taken away from the flow of your paper with the placement of some paragraphs. It makes the essay more confusing and not really fluid. Also, your thesis statement isn't stated til later in your paper. I think you need to state your stance earlier and then go back and incorporate the other side of the argument. Other than that, there are a few sentence structure problems and grammatical errors that need to be fixed. Overall I think this is a great starting point and your final paper can be a great one
    Brooke

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  8. Bryan,

    This draft was definitely a positive change. I think you realized what a Rogerian Argument really is and how to change your paper. I liked the intro, it was insightful and made you think.

    I was somewhat confused in the second and third paragraph though, I didn't really get the point you were trying to make and some of your words were kind of confusing.

    I think you did a really good job of supporting your side, that the death penalty shouldn't be used. I REALLY like the argument that being in jail is a CORRECTIONAL facility. That was a strong point in forming my own personal beliefs. The ideal situation is to allow someone to become a better person and change who they are. Life in jail is a major punishment, but still allows them to change into better people and maybe change the other inmates around them who didn't receive the death penalty. And sometimes I even think giving the death penalty could be seen to some criminals as an easy way out and serving life in prison could be a harder sentence.

    But, I think you need more support to the other side of the argument. Strenghtening that would help your essay to be more Rogerian. I like that you presented a compromise of more humane methods. I think you could also present the idea of limiting the use of capital punishment for only extreme cases. Also- great sources. Maybe work on incorporating them more though!

    Good Luck with your next draft!
    Danielle Guy

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  9. I really liked how you addressed your topic. Your introduction was well written and I liked how you started off talking about the lessons you learned as a child. You included lots of great evidence that showed that you performed excellent research. I feel like while you included strong points you can present your points with better sentences. Add some variety to the length and beginning of your sentences. Also work on creating a clearer flow between your paragraphs and your entire essay. Your second paragraph is really good, but you should try to move it to a different part of your essay. Other than a few problems you did a good job writing a rogerian argument; your vocabulary and compromise showed that this was a rogerian argument.

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  10. Dear Bryan,

    I think this was a great topic to write about. It's argued often and equally on both sides.

    I could easily tell that you are against the death penalty from the first paragraph. Also, I think you supported your side of the argument with some great points and facts.

    However, I think you should maybe include more about the opposite side and maybe include some more citations to show more about it.

    Great job and keep up the great work! Good luck on your final draft!

    Hannah

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  11. Dear, Bryan
    As I said before, your topic is very interesting. I think your second draft improved than the first draft. You have a lot of information and sources, and those are very good to support your ideas and argument. You are really good job at using many sources. Because of your many sources, I feel your argument reliable and can persuade many people who have positive opinions about the death penalty.

    In your first draft, you didn’t choose any sides because you were in the middle of two opinions. However, this draft is clear and strong to show your opinions, and now I can understand what you want to say. However, I am still confusing some parts.

    Your opinions are strong tan the first draft one, but still they are pretty weak. I felt you responded about the information and sources. Therefore, I would recommend make your opinions strong.

    Also, the introduction is pretty confusing for me. I was not sure about your thesis statements very well throughout your introduction. If you can put or make strong thesis statements, it will be better to understand your statements.

    However, I really liked your introduction and personal experience. Those are very good to catch the attention from readers.


    Overall, I really enjoyed reading and your paper is good. Please keep working…
    Good Luck.
    Thank you

    Minsun

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  12. Bryan,

    good paper. overall i thought you did well conveying your point of view and distinguishing between the prominent competing points of view. You had good quality information and quotes but i feel that you could have done a better job incorporating some of those quotes into your paper. The quote about the Stanford Binet tests was extremely confusing. It was well placed and supported your opinion but the way that it was incorporated was rather cloudy. The one other thing that i noticed that needs to be changed is your use of the word bias. In several instances you used bias where it was appropriate to use biased instead, just look over those.


    Well done, this has a lot of potential.


    Good Luck,
    Tom

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  13. Hey Bryan!
    Cool essay dude. Definitely something to think about...I like that. You use lots of really good examples throughout your paper like in the second paragraph with Paul Powell and when you discuss the Standford-Binet. I like your words like "cruel", "immoral", but I think you overuse phrases like "the idea that..", "this also...", "sums up...", and "at the same time..." It just gets boring to read, so maybe try throwing some other words in there to spice it up. I think your 5th paragraph is a little misplaced and maybe belongs more towards the beginning, say after the introduction or so. I enjoy your voice throughout, it's powerful and persuasive, but I feel like this is written for informatively rather than taking a stand for something. I feel like I'm being taught all about the process of the judicial system and the workings of the death penalty, etc. I'm not sure that's the exact idea we're supposed to work for, but I don't think it would be hard to switch up. Also your conclusion is a bit weak. Remember that you want to finish strong with your opinion and ideas and restate why it's right from what you mentioned in the essay prior and your audience will leave with your thoughts and tying them to their own for their own personal opinion. You already have such a strong asset here, B, I don't think it's going to be much work to make it a final paper. Good work, young grasshopper!
    Peace, Katie

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  14. Dear Bryan,

    First of all I could see that you put a lot of effort into this paper. You have many, many great sources. I could also see your strong argument on this topic and that you tried to acknowledge the opposing view. I really like how you separate the importance of life and justice and that those who are for death penalty think justice is more important than the life. There are a couple of suggestions I want to make. Some of your ideas repeat throughout the paper. I think organizing your paragraphs better would be good. Also I thought the paragraph that starts with "When talking about the death penalty..." was not appropriate to the flow of your paper. I think maybe taking out that paragraph or moving it up would make the flow better. Overall, I think you are in great shape. You have clear reasons and supporting evidences. Good job and good luck on your final!!
    - Sora Shin

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  15. Bryan,

    This paper was well researched and very interesting to read. You're introduction really caught my eye and this paper really resembled rogerian qualities. However, I felt like you did not clearly choose a side. You merely talked about both sides and gave common rogerian terms but never actually stated your postion. You did have some awesome sources but are all of your sources really relevant? For instance you have statistical evidence from 2006, consider finding evidence from 2008 or 2009. I do like the idea of all of the stories you added into to give the pathos vibe.Now you also tended to use some of the same words a lot throught out the paper just try and vary your word choice. You also began to repeat yourself. For future revisions I suggest just vary your word choice and work on finding a 2009 statistic. overall this is a great paper. Good luck with your revisions.

    Lauren

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  16. First off, it's important to acknowledge the difficulty of writing a rogerian argument on this topic. After allm support of capital punishment is black and white, you either support it or you don't.
    That being said, this essay is a far cry from you last, as you, better than anyone remember, was indifferent. I like in this new draft how you chose a side, you clearly state midway through you are not in favor of the death penalty.
    Unfortunately you don't quite have a legitimate compromise. Proponents of the death penalty, I being one, do not want criminals to serve life in prison.
    Anyways, aside from the obvious obstacles you have to leap, it is a much improved essay from last time, perhaps some more internal organization would help keep it on track, as i found myself lost while reading through the first half.

    -Neal

    Also, you claim that life in prison costs the taxpayer more than the death penalty. Look this up, for GCOM, i was, against my personal convictions, and to surprise, able to find information to the opposite.

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